Apprentice Potter

loved it from beginning to end!

brilliant! dumbles and snape in one fell swoop; delightfult *smirk*

*whimpers and hides under blanket* this is soooo not gonna be pretty! LOVE the story!

WooHoo! Love it! Thanks for sharing.
On to part 2.

Yes......HELL YES....great story I really enjoyed it :)

Excellent work!

Dude, I love this stuff!!!
Wish could see Numbborenut & Snivelus's faces as Harry booked.

Great chapter. I particularly liked how Harry tried to deal with Blaise and Hermione. Really liked how Fred helped to take down Snape.

Thanks for writing.
Monkey

Great story, loving the taking the fight to dumbles like that. You really explore Occlumency and Ligilimency with a lot more detail than most fanfic authors, bravo is all I'll say to that.

"After all, if my daughter was turned to stone at school, I'd seriously consider other, less-dangerous, education establishments, though given recent events, a school set up next to a fusion plant built by and staffed with people suffering from Parkinson's Disease would be a safer choice than Hogwarts." This has to be in contention for the best line of the story so far.

Thanks for writing.
Monkey

This story is a great deal of fun. I thought at first that your angry harry would start to get to me. He is a little over angry and times but the way in which he vents himself are funny enough to forgive. Plus his reasoning ans arguments are actually far to valid to ignore.

Thanks for writing.
Monkey

Thats a great start. I like the use of Harry's pov. Will you keep it like that all the way through?

The jokes are good too, particularly Moody's eye needing a passport.

brava! brava! this was a brilliantly plotted, detailed and executed fic! i loved every word!

Quite good overall, and one of the better explanations for, "the power the dark lord knows not." I am of course referiing to the leadership argument. On the minus side while this was technically good and compelling, it did use somewhat cliched themes to move the story. I.E. manipulating Harry for his own good, incompetant power hungry goverment officials, wise old man that shows him the way, etc.

Perhaps it was a weakness to use first person for the entire story, since it provided complete insight into the main character. The view from the gallery that third person presents, that would have allowed people to see Harry from how other people viewed him might have increased the emotional impact in some places. Along the same lines, for instance, what would it have been like if the events of the duel with Malfoy were told by one of the spectators? If you kept using minor characters or third person through the point where Harry and Dumbledoor reconcile it might have had a greater impact. At any rate, it is just an idea..

On another note, usually when you have a matchup with two female leads the portrayal of the women tends to be more generic. Here, the relationship was only a secondary thread, as were both women, so its hard to comment much there. It will be interesting to see if in the stories that apparently follow how this all plays out.

Thanks for taking the time to share your story.

Huh. So THAT'S where this story disappeared to. I remember reading this years ago, and I couldn't find it.

Don't recall there being a post epilogue. Or sequels, for that matter.

When did VOldemort start giving out dark marks? Zab apparently worked for Voldemort at some point, yet no dark mark ....?

"You think I've had plans in the past? Ha!"
poor stomach; laughed too hard.

Highly Skippable

Standard opening, well done except for Harry's philosophical errors.

This would be cliché except it is supposedly an early, and good, example of the genre.

Alright, this story is excellent. Well done, great job, all that. I liked angry!Harry much more than I thought I would going in. I'm a bit surprised, looking back, that Harry in canon wasn't even angrier in Book 6 than in Book 5; he certainly had reason to be. How could he be so off-balance for all of Book 5, then find out THERE'S A PROPHECY ABOUT HIM HAVING TO KILL VOLDEMORT OR DIE TRYING, and then suddenly become the docile stooge JKR painted in Book 6?!?

Anyway, he has every reason to be furious, and I like the way you've written that seething, barely-checked anger into almost every portion of this story. Thanks for a very enjoyable read.

In the interest of fairness (and to satisfy my own curiosity), I have to point out what I think a two plot holes in the story.

One: If all the Death Eaters who returned to Voldemort (after his rebirth) burned to ash when Voldemort was exuberantly lobotomized, why didn't Snape die as well? He had returned to Riddle's service, whether on his own or as Dumbledore's spy, and Riddle would certainly have trusted Snape no more than the other returning Death Eaters.

Two: Voldemort tells Harry they've been waiting to spring the Hogsmeade trap for weeks, waiting for Harry to show up. But Harry arrives with Grawp, only AFTER they see the giants attacking and herding the twnspeople toward the waiting Death Eaters. How did they know to spring the trap?

Anyway, I really liked the story, and if those two things can be explained, I'll have to rank it even higher in my personal list of quality HP fanfiction.

Thanks for the entertainment!!

I read a post on DLP forums praising your fics. So glad I decided to check them out!

First of all, your writing is very good and I would even say, professional. Many of the fics I've read are miles behind. Gotta love the humor you mixed in as well.

I also liked how you depicted the characters. Harry is strong, but very believably so; he keeps learning, and he didn't get where he is overnight.

I also liked the occasional teamwork and him leading and teaching people. Some fics with Independent!Harry seem to turn him into a superman and also get rid of all his former friends. But here all characters get their part of development as well, which is just awesome and just the type of story I like! :)

I am a fan of Harry/Hermione, but here things are further spiced up by very original and interesting Blaise character. <3

At times I did feel that Harry's anger and hate were excessive, but then again even the summary warns about it so I'm not complaining by any means.

The remote casting bit was original (as in, I haven't encountered this in any other fic I've read), and even fit the canon well (which again is one of the things I like). On the other hand I don't really see how this power could be used to get an edge over Voldemort (aside from surprising him like they did, of course).

I think Harry's vast magical power and his reflexes played a much bigger role in his victory over Voldemort and Death Eaters, not this situational 'remote casting' thingy.

Oh, and the ending of the fic with the implied threesome was, for lack of a better word, pure win!