Betrayal of the Best Kind
By Draco664
'...only took a few hours to gather enough evidence to organise a raid, and only two days to organise that raid. In a massive yet discrete operation, hundreds of Ministry officials deployed themselves to Buckingham Palace, and launched an assault on the headquarters of the Dark Lord.'
Where you have 'discrete' I think the correct word is 'discreet', - they do not mean the same thing.
Excellent story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I'm going to read the sequel next. Thank you for writing, and please continue writing your remarkable stories.
KUTGW,
Noreen
This is the first time I've came across this story. Although it's old and I almost cringed from the 'she phoned him'
bit, it was actually a really good start. And I'm guessing when
this was first penned it wasn't a cliche at all, maybe even the first instance I dare say? Really I did wonder where people got that from, always seemed random to me! Anyway I came across a forum
which said this was one of the best HP/CC fanfics out there and well from this start I hope it's right!
I suppose the beginning was slightly annoying, because it is generally not fun to see the hero of the story in his worst nightmare, apparently with the cooperation of his friends. The fact that
they did not try harder to find a way he could have been innocent is disappointing, particularly Dumbledore, since he was old enough and intelligent enough to think of other possibilities, and he, in
particularly needed Harry to defeat Voldemort.
As time progressed, there was the tendancy to skim a bit to get the entire story caught up to real time so what happened was uncovered. Past that point it went from just wanting to know what happened
to really being quite compelling.
Cho's actions before the cliff seemed a little forced. I think it may have been a mistake to not flesh out her motivations a little better. They were believable, but more back story there might have
helped.
Additionally, Dumbledore trying to ambush Harry seemed unreasonable. It would be different in Harry was convicted of killing a true innocent, instead of a junior death eater wannabe. No, the most
logical plan there would have been to furnish Sirius with the trial records and see what happened.
Additionally, the idea of Harry being immune to the truth serum seemed one of the too convienent things. It would have then made sense to force everyone else to take the serum. Now maybe Dumbledore
couldn't pull off such a thing, but it still is a bit disappointing that his friends didn't try harder.
Finally the ambush at the end with Harry seemed to be pushing bounds of reasonableness, given that he had not finished his work, and he was surprised. Still, the use of non magical compounds and such
was a nice twist.
Overall the story was quite good. Thanks for writing and posting it.
I lost this story once and didn't find it for quite some time. I am so happy that i found it now, it's wonderful.
Man, this last scene... ROTFL
But interesting battle, using potions and muggle traps. That's certainly not used very often, if used at all. Very creative :)
You know it was Hermione that treat Harry's life like a joke and laughing matter to begin with. Dubbing his death escaping a stupid name. Joking about "DUMPING" a baby on the hateful muggle
family. Demanding Answers about his animagus ability first and foremost because it was academic aspects no doubt. Calling him little bastard.
To have friends like that , better not to have at all.
What a bunch of useless bitches.
No one is that forgiving.
Harry shook his head. "They shouldn't be now. I suggested using poly-juice potion. Pluck a hair from the remains and drink the potion. You should be identifiable then."
If this was true, when Barty Crouch Jr. took Polyjuice to replace Mad-Eye Moody in OOTP, he would not have his scars or miss the eye or the leg.
Right...one kiss from Cho erased all of his time in Azkaban....bit of a stretch there I imagine.
~Matt
An excellent story, and a very well done pairing between Harry and Cho. A relationship that is really rather difficult to write, since she got only the barest amount of screen time in the books.
Certainly more than a few, but not nearly enough. Especially to easily write a magnificent story. More power to this accomplishment.
Furthermore, this story is fairly unique in the fact that it's complete. While I did notice you wrote a sequel (which you also completed!) it's always nice to be able to sit down, read a story, and
then read the end. A disturbingly rare thing in the fan fiction world.
Although it was quite clear, I think from the beginning that Harry and Cho would end up together, you did a marvelous job dealing with not only the Wizarding World's betrayal of Harry, but also with
a lot of the character interaction. It was a very thrilling and often enthralling ride.
A very well done job, and certainly of the caliber I expect from the wonderful authors of this site. I'll admit that with a pen-name like 'Draco664' I had certain... preconceptions, but clearly, you
know what you're doing.
Great story.
ruth =)