Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 2:06pm

Even our hero, Harry suffers from the muck he is wading in.

I hope you grant him relief soon.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 1:55pm

You create such tension with bad things like Cho's battered body.

Then you brilliantly set up the scenario how it was not as bad as it looked, and make Harry look brilliant and devious in execution of his action.

Thrilling read.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 1:25pm

Well, this should serve to get Lucius hurt very badly, fairly well distrusted, punished for disobedience, if not out right killed for attempting to rape Cho.

If Voldemort doesn't do it, he may let Harry.

Terrible and compelling.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 1:07pm

I want to be sick again.

I see no way this will work out, unless somehow Harry made her look this way magically without hurting her.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 12:50pm

This is frightening for the four kids to go with Sirius. I fear for his life protecting those four, Ginny especially.

Tremendous story. Excellent characterizations.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 12:37pm

It has occurred to me that perhaps no one could better prepare Harry to fight Voldemort and Death Eaters than Voldemort and Death Eaters.

Your story takes advantage of that concept and does it so very well.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 12:23pm

Okay, the ralph was justified, even if it didn't happen.

I do hope this is all Harry's plan. I know Harry won't go over really to theDark, but I do want this to be all pre-meditated.

His talent for dredging up hatred thoughts to fight dementors should serve him well instead of occlumency training.

I still want to hurl though, your story is just that gutwrenching.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 12:12pm

I like the Cho and Sirius friendship.

But I am afraid that Harry is going to join Voldemort to be the inside the inner circle spy. That makes me want to ralph.

Great writing to stir such emotions.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 12:05pm

Death Eaters. This is a fascinating development. This tale is compelling to the point of compulsion.

Got to go forward.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 11:57am

This is getting revenge on his aunt and uncle on a grand scale.

Dumbledore can blame himself if he didn't want this to happen.

How are you going to bring Harry back into friendship with any of them?

Or are you?

Deliciously convoluted.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 11:49am

I have to review, but this is so enthralling at this point that I jump to the next chapter.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 11:42am

Three cheers for Sirius.

The logic trail you've created is wonderful. This is a delightfully complex and compelling story. That last bit about DADA teachers was clever and again.

Thrilling!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 11:30am

Ugh. Please tell me Cho is really playing Dumbledore and does believe Harry is innocent.

This is a phenomenol detective story.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 11:14am

So now I see how Harry ended up in Azkaban.

This was an excellent plot to accomplish this, just excellent.

I am very impressed with the way you have drawn canon events together to make this story line.

Just incredible.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 10:55am

The old man blushes a little at the last bit.

Poor Ginny. I hate it when she is hurt when Harry goes for other girls.

But this is a great Harry/Cho you have going here.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 10:40am

The best tribute to Cedric I have read. Few write one. I hadn't planned to, but now I might if there is some way to fit one in.

I enjoyed the Harry and Sirius reunion.

Great stuff.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 10:15am

So, you are going to leave a cliffie about Harry in the Shreiking Shack, hmm? I am so glad I am reading this after completion of this tale.

But I am sure I will find myself waiting for your chapters in the sequel.

Wonderful story.

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 10:01am

That was a heart warming exchange.

I like this Cho. Most make her disasterous or dispicable or both. my first short was a H/C.

Your Cho is delightful. A realistic starting sixth year, and proper admirer of Harry.

Great chappie.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 9:48am

Ah, so many set up questions answered.

Can we hurt Fudge a whole lot? A very great deal? This sends me back to my writing with more zeal to do him bad in my fics.

The Animagus Training Manual and how Harry has it is brilliant and beyond.

So very clever.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 15th February 2006 9:41am

Interesting start. Most make a successful Harry/Cho by taking them beyond Hogwarts or having them make up after OotP. I've not seen a post-HBP H/C.

This is really better though as a start. But I have no idea where actually starting Harry off in Azkaban will lead.

AU and a curious fascination.